Born Under A Bad Moon

[dj]

Hi, Jeffery:

Well, that woke me up!

Good song -- hard-hitting lyrics. It's suddenly 1969, again! (Insert hippie emoji here.)

I like your drum grooves and your guitar fills (I changed the top keyboard line to a power guitar sound and dropped it an octave. It works.)

On the lyrics side, you might consider changing "Martin Luther" to "MLK". It's the first item that gives us the theme of the piece and I was initially confused as to whether we would be discussing the 15th century Reformation of the Catholic church or not. It's clear shortly after but first impressions are important.

Also "veins". A bit of a pedantic spelling point, I know, but if it goes out to the public, don't give them anything small to quibble about -- let them argue about the big things.

You decided to fade out quite early, starting at bar 123, but I erased the volume curves and found that you've got a good groove going right to the end. I suggest building on that, rather than fading out, and giving that final Em chord at bar 130 even more power.

Yeah, it's been one helluva year on every front, hasn't it?

Hope all of that helps.

David